I'm looking for an apartment,and there are descriptions of two apartments on the Net. There are several difference between them. First of all,there two large bedroom in Fairfax Apartments,while there are only a bedroom in CAMPUS APT. Second, Fairfax is furished,whereas CAMPUS is unfurnished. Besides,pets are'nt allow in Fairfax. However, pets are aloow in CAMPUS. Next, the rent for per month in Fairfax is $1250 while the rent in Campus is ony $900 plus utilities. I would prefer CAMPUS APT than Fairfax Apartments. It's because that the rent is much more cheaper than another.
difference可以數
回覆刪除there two large bedroom少了be動詞喔!bedroom也要加s
allow要加ed
最後一個字要改成the other~因為只有兩間在做比較(another是用於三者或以上)
可以多一些附加論點~比如說有兩間房間為什麼比較好啦~有附傢俱的優點在哪啦!等等之類的~
回覆刪除這樣文章比較豐富喔!