2011年5月18日 星期三

Contrasting-2

I would hire Debra for the job for several reasons. First of all, Debra has more education than Lynn. Second, Debra has more employment experience than Lynn.  Therefore, she may have enough experience to assume the job. Beside,she had published "English Verb Tenses in Shoetman Publishing Company, and this publication also prove his English ability. According to these reason, I consider that Debra have enough qualification ,and I wound choose her to be a new instructor for my school.

5 則留言:

  1. 1.少一邊引號"English Verb Tenses"
    2.this publication also prove his English ability.有點怪怪的...→改成he also prove his English ability會不會比較好???

    另外阿~
    這篇的標題好像是contrasting 2
    contrasting 1是租公寓的那篇!!

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  2. prove要加s唷!
    倒數第三行reason可以數!
    然後是Debra has不是have喔
    感覺很多句子都是以"Debra has..."為開頭
    可以再改變一下寫法~

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  3. Beside,she had published "English Verb Tenses in~
    "English Verb Tenses"少一個 "
    has more 有點重複 要不要改一下

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  4. 第三行Beside要加s
    倒數第三行reason也要加s

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  5. 前面要不要鋪陳一下~有點直接
    多一些附加論點來支持妳的1.2.3.點會比較豐富喔!

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